Monday, September 26, 2011

Survive some more [short poem]



Beneath the smile,
Lays a wounded soul,
Scars many, a lasting pain,
One more blow, I couldn’t care
Survived so far, will survive some more!

~Sam

P.S: This is my first attempt at a progressive poem- 3 words to 7 words. 

17 comments:

Red Handed said...

Survived till now, will survive some more.
Loved this. Short but said it all.

Sunil Padiyar said...

How thoughtful! nice composition sam...

Arjit Srivastava said...

"Survived so far, will survive some more!" Sums it up. Survival is the key.

sowmya said...

nice poem!though short very sweet!

Susan Deborah said...

Life moves on, isn't it and that makes it beautiful.

Joy always,
Susan

Kunal said...

first attempt..is quite good :)
I am not very good at writing poems..so..I don't even try much..and that's why..when I come across something which is short, sweet and says it all..I just can't help but admire it. :)

Keep it coming!

Saru Singhal said...

It's absolutely true and this is what I keep on telling myself when life is harsh. Beautifully penned Sam...:)

Yuvika said...

Survived so far, will survive some more!

Have loved it so far, will love more - cheers to your poetry!

Chintan said...

Sameera, I think this was one of your best. I liked that you used simpler words, the progressive style is amazing and thus the ending is so much stronger :)

Very well done!

Cheers

Chintan

Ambika said...

Interesting, "progressive poem" is new to me! Makes a stronger impact on the reader I guess, as it builds up to the end.

Ambika said...

And I liike your new blog design :)

Rahul Bhatia said...

Nice poetry! Liked the ending

☆ Rià ღ said...

Good one. :)

P.S Got here from Redhanded's blog.

blackandwhiteheart said...

really beautiful, painful. and talks a mountain about enduring pain.

got here through "saru singhal"'s blog... this 5 line post is enough to make me constantly look for new posts from you..

Sameera said...

Thank you everybody!!

@Chintan- Thank you- that is very encouraging.
@Ambika- Thanks- was waiting for someone to notice the change in design. Thanks!
@Ria- Thank you and welcome to my blog!
@blackandwhiteheart- Thanks.. welcome to the blog!

Aakash Kokz said...

Beautifully written, deep thoughts ..

daisegom said...

This is one of best short poems I have come across ever. I really like simple words used in poem here. Can you list here some more such like poems as those are quite easy to understand and remember.

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